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God, I'm slow getting to this. Anyway... Overall, it's pretty well done. I'll focus primarily on things to improve on. ...

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  • Mood: Tired
  • Listening to: Sabaton - Screaming Eagles
  • Reading: Quest threads and related stories.
  • Watching: Infinite Stratos
  • Playing: Skyrim
  • Eating: EGGS AND BACON.
  • Drinking: Ginger Ale, cranberry juice, rum. Delicious!
So, while it's certainly been longer than I had intended, I'm getting ready to start writing more Heartcore Harem. Yay!
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Yeah. So. I need some feedback from my readers. We're halfway through Bonding all the girls, at two of four. I've been trying to use the Bonding scene as a chance to explore the characters' interactions and personalities in a personal setting (standing practically nude tends to make things that way, I would thnk), and I have two more to do. I'm intending to write them out fully, since it would be a disservice to leave one or both out after doing the others. However, I wanted to know - is that what people want? I'm worried the repetition might be a bit boring, but this far in I'm not sure.

So tell me, my dearies - are you all okay with me writing out two more Bonding scenes fully, or should I find some way to summarize them?

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Hi again, Stephen. I just wanted to tell you that I made a sequel to "Death Knight vs Ninja".
I was hoping that you might like this one as much as the first one. :)
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~FreedomKnight May 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Got to it, finally!
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:iconangelman26:
Happy Demon Girl Appreciation Day!

Also, Happy Birthday! Have a great day and eat a lot of cake! :D
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~FreedomKnight May 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Too much to eat yesterday, the cake was too much! D:
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:iconsorantheman:
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Hi, Stephen. I just wanted to than you for the inspiration you gave me in order to complete this new work, featurning a death knight fighting a kunoichi.

Please tell me what you think about it :D
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~FreedomKnight Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Left you my feedback on the submission.
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:iconsorantheman:
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I just finished the next chapter in Axe To The Face.
Please tell me what you think of it.
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~FreedomKnight Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Tough for me to read - I have a hard time with so many crossovers because I don't know all of the source materials. Seems fairly well written, though, fine job so far!
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:iconsorantheman:
thank you :). However, I doubt it will be any easier to read in future chapters considering how even MORE characters are involved in the TvTropes Pantheon.

PS: Do you think I should upload it to DeviantArt?
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~FreedomKnight Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Regarding uploading to DA...unless you know you have followers who are interested in that specifically, it won't get much feedback. From experience, Heartcore Harem didn't get much attention at all, and even less by way of comments and suggestions. Not that I regret my choice to bring it here.

Rather hard to improve when no one seems to want to respond to it, you know? I would recommend another venue for text stories (not that I know of many) if you want people to see it and make note.
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