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December 8, 2012
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  • Mood: Tired
  • Listening to: Sabaton - Screaming Eagles
  • Reading: Quest threads and related stories.
  • Watching: Infinite Stratos
  • Playing: Skyrim
  • Eating: EGGS AND BACON.
  • Drinking: Ginger Ale, cranberry juice, rum. Delicious!
So, while it's certainly been longer than I had intended, I'm getting ready to start writing more Heartcore Harem. Yay!
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Yeah. So. I need some feedback from my readers. We're halfway through Bonding all the girls, at two of four. I've been trying to use the Bonding scene as a chance to explore the characters' interactions and personalities in a personal setting (standing practically nude tends to make things that way, I would thnk), and I have two more to do. I'm intending to write them out fully, since it would be a disservice to leave one or both out after doing the others. However, I wanted to know - is that what people want? I'm worried the repetition might be a bit boring, but this far in I'm not sure.

So tell me, my dearies - are you all okay with me writing out two more Bonding scenes fully, or should I find some way to summarize them?
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:iconalanes:
*AlanES Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I personally would like to keep the bonding scenes as they are. You don't have to worry about repetitiveness since it's a different demoness every time, but I can understand where you're coming from.

I suppose it all comes down to the remaining two girls' experiences with Syranon himself before the Bondings. SuKo was necessity and Teo was intrigue after the fact. I can understand your desire to perform Ame's, but you did kind of write yourself into a hole with Eme, didn't you? XD

Her interaction with the love-love assassin that Syranon's becomes due to her concoction means there's still hope yet. Perhaps once he's scraped his brains off'a Amethyst's knuckles, you could get her out of that lab of her's and have her set up a kind of get-together in the guise of a more personal experiment?
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~FreedomKnight Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah. When it comes time to do more, I'll go through 'em. Even if the overall concept doesn't change between them all, it's another opportunity to demonstrate their personality differences.

Shush! No holes here! :B

And get outta my mind, durn it! Those are MY plot secrets to reveal!
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:iconalanes:
*AlanES Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I do that.

MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAA
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:iconsorantheman:
i think you should keep the bondings, but remember to keep them intresting.
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~FreedomKnight Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That's what I'm afraid of. Amethyst's is going to be one I'm looking forward to writing, but I'm still debating how to handle Emerald's.
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:iconson-of-orochi:
I say try fleshing them out fully. It's interesting to see the interactions between Syranon and his bond mates whenever they go through the process. It helps give some insight to how both parties feel about this big commitment they're about to make (FOR THE GREATER GOOD AND ALL).

Overall, Heartcore Harem has been a treat to read so far. You're doing great; it's awesome to see such iconic characters in a slightly different light.
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~FreedomKnight Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That's why it was my original plan to be thorough. Just wanted to know I wasn't imagining it being worth the time.

Many thanks. No idea when the next bit will be posted yet, but I've been getting back to work on it.
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:iconson-of-orochi:
I think it'd worth the time and character development, personally. The experience would flesh out the characters more for what's to come planned ahead; it'd make a more interesting ride that way.
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